Friday, March 22, 2013

FRIDAY FICTIONEERS - Hannah's Punishment

It's time for my favorite weekly writing challenge--the Friday Fictioneers! Writers from around the world write these wee tales based on the same photo prompt. Here is this week's photo compliments of our Hawaiian friend, Doug Macilroy.





HANNAH’S PUNISHMENT
By Beth Carter

Hannah swatted a fly with her tail, her sneer undetectable due to the hose in her mouth. What? The cows are too good for this?

Her neck ached. Why doesn’t Farmer Fred put in an irrigation system? Hannah glared as Fred drove his new John Deere. She grimaced when she saw his fancy Range Rover. She suspected he had received a big lottery payout.

She knew she was being punished for placing fourth during the team roping event. Sure, my talking brother, Mr. Ed, got a TV show. Meanwhile, I get to hold this stupid hose and get trench hoof.

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39 comments:

  1. UnknownMarch 22, 2013 at 3:41 PM

    Good approach. Too bad he could spray the farmer.

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  2. GardenloverMarch 22, 2013 at 4:46 PM

    Beth, this is Russell using Connie's log in.

    I wondered when someone was going to sneak Mr. Ed into one of these stories. Looking back, I wish I'd written one about Mr. Ed's smarter brother - HA!

    Sounds like this poor horse got the short end of the stick.

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  3. BethMarch 22, 2013 at 5:00 PM

    I wondered who you were!

    Yes, we can't all be winners every time. Poor Hannah did get the short, soggy end. But knowing women, she'll get revenge.

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  4. BethMarch 22, 2013 at 5:00 PM

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  5. AnonymousMarch 22, 2013 at 7:12 PM

    hahaha this was awesome
    "What? The cows are too good for this?" -- you had me by this line.lol ^^

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    1. BethMarch 22, 2013 at 8:39 PM

      I'm so glad you liked it. Yeah, I wondered why the poor horse had hose duty.

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  6. janetMarch 22, 2013 at 8:13 PM

    Thanks for including team roping. Was she part of the header or heeler team? And I love the trench hoof (which wouldn't really be funny if it happened.)

    Happy weekend,

    janet

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    1. BethMarch 22, 2013 at 8:42 PM

      You are way ahead of me with that question, Janet. I only know a few of the rodeo stunts but not in great detail.

      All I could think about was how WET her hoof was getting so I had to include something about that. Thank you.

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  7. Tom PoetMarch 22, 2013 at 11:35 PM

    Poor horse... getting treated like that. Nice Job Beth. I enjoyed this.
    Tom

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    1. BethMarch 23, 2013 at 8:25 AM

      Well, if she had done better at that rodeo... Thanks, Tom.

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  8. Perry BlockMarch 23, 2013 at 1:43 AM

    Never fear, poor Hannah! Silver Flash the Stud is on his way!

    More I can't do for you ...

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    1. BethMarch 23, 2013 at 8:29 AM

      Silver Flash the Stud would, indeed, cheer Hannah up. I bet she'd drop that hose in a hurry. Thanks, Perry.

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  9. Sandra CrookMarch 23, 2013 at 2:53 AM

    One unhappy horse, hey? Nicely done.

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    1. BethMarch 23, 2013 at 8:34 AM

      She doesn't want to be the only one working on the farm. Thanks, Sandra.

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  10. Rochelle Wisoff-FieldsMarch 23, 2013 at 5:11 AM

    Willllllllburrrrrrr...this has been the week of homage to Mr. Ed. I enjoyed that show.
    Cute story, Beth. Hope Hannah can rise above being a farmer's nag.
    Shalom,
    Rochelle

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    1. BethMarch 23, 2013 at 8:37 AM

      Oh, she's not nagging.She senses Unfair treatment on the farm and is a bit snarky about that.

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  11. AnonymousMarch 23, 2013 at 6:00 AM

    I like the horse's voice in the story, with the bitterness toward others on the farm. Nice addition with the farmer having a new tractor and Range Rover!

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    1. BethMarch 23, 2013 at 8:39 AM

      I'm glad you "got" her voice. Thanks, Zookyworld.

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  12. TrudyMarch 23, 2013 at 8:51 AM

    We didn't get Mr Ed over here in the UK, but it seems to be cropping up in lots of the stories this week. This is really funny, I like her voice, and her snarky little comments about the farmer. :)

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    1. BethMarch 23, 2013 at 9:01 AM

      Oh, too bad you didn't get to see Mr. Ed. It was a cute show when I was a kid. Maybe you can see it online.

      I'm glad you liked my story. Thanks!

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  13. AnonymousMarch 23, 2013 at 10:02 AM

    Hannah has such a great voice. Maybe she can point that hose in the direction of Fred's John Deere.

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    1. BethMarch 23, 2013 at 10:48 AM

      Ha! You know she'd love to hose Fred and his fancy John Deere. Thanks.

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  14. tedstrutzMarch 23, 2013 at 10:07 AM

    GOOD ONE!!!!

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    1. BethMarch 23, 2013 at 10:49 AM

      Thanks, Ted. I didn't see you on the board yesterday. Will check again.

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  15. AnonymousMarch 23, 2013 at 6:59 PM

    Hi Beth,
    Always enjoy your stories and this one is no exception. Wanted to ask you something. I have an 8-month-old grandson and I wanted to get some of your books to read to him. Where could I get them? Thanks. Ron

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    1. BethMarch 23, 2013 at 10:19 PM

      Hi Ron.

      That's so nice of you to think of my books! Both picture books are available on Amazon and BN.com. I also have a supply. If you want me to personalize them with your grandson's name, let me know and thank you!

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  16. ShirleyMarch 23, 2013 at 8:17 PM

    Loved this, Beth. I see you added Mr. Ed to yours. I also added another old TV horse. This was a fun prompt. Can't wait to catch up on all the stories.

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    1. BethMarch 23, 2013 at 10:22 PM

      Yes, I couldn't resist including Mr. Ed! Hopping over to yours now. Thanks, Shirley.

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  17. Douglas MacIlroyMarch 24, 2013 at 12:31 AM

    Dear Beth,

    You have a whimsical take on the prompt and it left me chuckling. Good job.

    If I have to do the Captcha thing I'm going to be thinking like that horse. Here goes....

    Aloha,

    Doug

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    1. BethMarch 24, 2013 at 10:23 AM

      I thought the photo called for whimsy. I disabled my word verification a few weeks ago. Hope it took! Thanks for commenting and for the cool photo, Doug.

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  18. brudbergMarch 24, 2013 at 10:53 AM

    Oh I wish I'd ever seen that Ed and Wilbur show... and I love the trench foot. :-)

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    1. BethMarch 24, 2013 at 12:26 PM

      I guess it was only shown in the U.S. A cute, funny show when we were kids. Thank you for stopping by.

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  19. AnonymousMarch 24, 2013 at 5:49 PM

    Ha! I too thought about Mr Ed - that was a fine show that brought a smile.

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    1. BethMarch 25, 2013 at 12:42 PM

      Yes, it was kind of a silly show that I barely remember as a young girl but it stuck in my mind nonetheless.

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  20. AnonymousMarch 25, 2013 at 9:30 AM

    It’s funny the different things we each see from the same picture. Yours was cute and the hoof getting wet never even occurred to me.

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    1. BethMarch 25, 2013 at 12:44 PM

      I know. So many takes from the same prompt always amazes me. All I could think about was how wet that hoof was getting and how his neck must ache. Thanks!

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  21. DobsonMarch 25, 2013 at 12:27 PM

    Fourth place at his farm means manual labor for the horse. The farmer is unafraid to spend money on himself. Poor horse may have to talk to Ed's agent.

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    1. BethMarch 25, 2013 at 12:45 PM

      Exactly. Mr. Ed had a much better agent. Thanks for stopping by.

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